Tuesday, May 6, 2014

Creative Writing: Blog #4 (Writing Sample)

I chose to put up my Character Writing for this blog post. I think I have done very well with this writing. Before reading my writing, you will need to know that it is about two girls that go to college together. They both have very different personalities. They both plan a road trip when something terrible happens. Read on to find out.

Character Writing:

An Unexpected Twist

            We are finally on the road trip. Yes, that’s right the road trip to Florida that Audrey and I were planning on forever has finally come to life. Audrey and I first met in our freshman year of college. We are both in the best fashion school in Maine-yes, you heard me right-I said Main. Even to this day, it is still a surprise to me how Audrey and I became friends. We practically have different personalities. Obviously, I am the more responsible one and Audrey is the lazy one that won’t get her butt off of the couch.

            “Whoa, WATCH IT!” Audrey roared at me.

            Oops, I guess I kind of steered off of the road for a moment.

            “Sorry, and I don’t think that you should be the one talking. After all, you are the one that refused to drive,” I replied to her very rude comment.

            I looked over to the passenger side of the car where Audrey was sitting. Her wavy strawberry blonde hair fell in perfect curls down her back and her attentive blue eyes were staring down at her phone as she slumped in her seat.

            “Ugh, she’s so annoying,” I murmured to myself.

            “I’m sorry, did you say something?” Audrey asked me.

            “Oh no, you’re fine. Just keep doing whatever you’re already doing,” I replied back sarcastically.

            “Gosh, I’m sorry I wouldn’t drive. I just didn’t want to break a nail.”

            I took another look at the road and hit the brakes as hard as I could. I watched as Audrey and I jerked forward.

            “Why did you hit the brakes?” Audrey asked me.

            “Look, it’s a flock of geese. I didn’t want to run them over, they’re just so adorable.”

            “Ok, now if you’re done admiring, we better get a move on or we will never make it to Miami Beach before it gets dark,” Audrey exclaimed.

            As soon as the geese crossed the road, I started the car again and glanced over at the GPS when the screen said we have three more hours until we make it to the Beach. After some time, I think I dozed off because Audrey had to yell at me for me to get her attention.

            “Hey, there’s a Starbucks in about ten minutes. Can we stop there and get a frappe?” Audrey asked me with her pouty mouth.

            As much as I wanted to say yes, I didn’t. Mostly because I really wanted to get to Miami Beach as soon as possible and the only way to do that is to not take any breaks and drive all the way.

            “If you want, we could stop at a rest area, freshen up, and you could get a drink from the vending machine,” I replied.

            “Fine…oh wait. There’s a rest area in the exit…take it. It’s right there.”

            I took a sharp right to get to the rest area. We almost fell out of the car and we could barely walk. Audrey made her way to the vending machine to buy a drink and I told her I was going to the bathroom to freshen up. I decided to change my clothes while I was in the bathroom, so I went to the trunk and picked up my duffel bag.

            “RUBY, what’s taking you so long? We have to get moving!” Audrey asked.

            “Just give me a second, I’m almost done. I just have to finish dressing up,” I replied back.

            I looked at myself in the mirror and stared at my reflection as my dark brown hair glided against my back, my hazel eyes staring back at me, and my toned body fitting gorgeously into the crotchet romper I changed into. I came out of the bathroom just in time to meet Audrey buying another three bottles of Starbucks frappes from the vending machine.

            “Ok, let’s get going now,” I told Audrey.

            “Oh, so now you want to go? After going out all like ‘I’m a total fashion dive’ Audrey said sarcastically.

            We spend about another hour on the road until my car started humming and wheezing. I checked the gas needle and noticed that it was pointing at zero.

            “SHOOT, we’re out of gas. What are we supposed to do now?” I asked Audrey.

            “OH MY GOD RUBY, we are in the middle of nowhere! Where do you think we are going to find gas? The only way we are going to get anywhere it to hitchhike,” Audrey explained as she got out of the car and started kicking the tire hoping the car would start back up again.

            “Well, if that’s the only way to get anywhere, then we might as well just do it instead of wasting any time,” I reassured Audrey.

            “Fine, we might as well?”

            We waited for about twenty minutes until someone finally stopped and offered us a ride. They were a very old couple that didn’t know any better than to give two girls in their twenties a ride.

            “Where ya’ll going?” the man asked me.

            “We are heading out to Miami Beach, sir. It would be great if you could give us a ride,” I replied.

            “Well, that’s not too far…tell ya what...grab your things and hop on in the car,” the benevolent man replied back.

            I looked over at Audrey just in time to see that she had a huge smile that reached from one end of her face to the other. All we really needed was to go to the beach, and we will figure out how to get back from there. I really didn’t want to waste my spring break thinking about how I am going to get back, but would rather try to make the most of it. I believe that Audrey would think so too and that’s all that matters.      
Explanation:
I think that this Character Writing is by far my best piece of writing. I think that I used vivid descriptions in order to describe the characters. Instead of telling, I showed the character's personalities through their actions. I also made it sound like they don't really get along that well sometimes because they have different personalities. When, I incorporated the conflict into the story, the character's reactions also said a lot about how they are like. Overall, I think I did a great job with this writing.